Some haiku we had to write for class, by lost the lonely dead Subscribe to rss feed for lost the lonely dead

(we werent following the five seven five thing, we were
focusing on setting a mood and then doing something to it at
the end)

Quiet night
The rain falls softly
Lightening strikes

Mid-summer
The hot sun beats down
A spring spouts water

A crowd
Laughing, carousing, jeering
She sits all alone

Speechless
Words conflict awkwardly
Poetry immerges 

Darkness
A peaceful quiet night
The farm’s on fire

Robots
All the same all lifeless
He pulls the trigger

Posted: 2006-04-02 02:42:30 UTC

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2006-04-22 22:36:56♥Just Sam♥
it isn't called haiku if it isn't 5,7,5... what you made is called a short poem....wow....who would have thought of that?

2006-04-23 03:51:56lost the lonely dead
actually no........5 7 5 makes horrable haiku, by contemporary standards.....the real way to right it is to forget the formula and focus on setting a "hai" and thne punching it at the end with a 'Ku' contemporary poetry breaks and sacrifices formulas and rules for creativity and in my opinion makes for better writing

2006-05-01 23:30:20Loneliness is condescending
what did you do to tick her off jeeeze and by the way i like the poem 5,7,5...5,7,5 rules confine and die

2006-05-02 16:08:08lost the lonely dead
yeah hey i like the vote rock on i got a 1 anyway......yeah i dont really care one way or the other but it was what the teach said *shrugs* sorry if i came across as upset or 'condescending'