Human Bondage, by Loneliness is condescending
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You've tied me up with words
Expecting nothing of me, demanding everything
Individuality through deformity
Lost within the indecision
Following the straight line of circles
Walking backwards into nowhere
The one who see nothing sees all
Dancing to the silent tune of screams
Crumbling into what I am
Blossoming under Icy stares of hate
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| Posted: 2005-02-24 06:16:54 UTC |
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| 2005-02-26 21:10:04 | perf3ct |
| I love it. I love how you have opposites like a strait line of circles and silent tune of screams. Thats amazing, it works well. |
| 2005-08-13 12:41:40 | ladypink |
| This is very good. I have read a few of your pieces and you are a good writer. Have you joined a writing site? I have joined Writing.com It's a good site and I get a lot of feedabck for my work. Helpful feedback. It's something I think you should consider because you have talent :-) |
| 2006-01-09 21:57:47 | .xx:+.Disposable.Darling.+:xx. |
| i also like how you use mix opposites into sentences. and for some reason the line "individuality through deformity" really made sence to me. i guess because it makes it seem like deformity is a gift in some sence, because you have it coupled with individuality which is i think, something every human longs for, to different, to be unique, to stand out, etc. in a sense it feels like, when you put it that way, ugly and deformed people are still blessed in their individuality. i don't know if that's what you were trying to say, but that's i think why it sounds beautiful to me. because if you can make deformity sounds appealing in any sense, that's talent. lol. --michelle. |