Dawn Broke are you weeping

By Loneliness is condescending •
By Loneliness is condescending •
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I like it its cool the only thing i would change is like jaws to jowls just cause i think it sounds cool but im being silly and whatever its cool, and i really love the last line
lost, the lonely dead-- I'm not sure that you know what "jowls" means... It's not jaws, it's skin that hangs from your cheeks and lower jaw when you get really old...
i find it very sad that you chose to make a comment to me and never say anything whatsoever about this dear soul's work and how absolutely beautiful it is........jowls can also imply the hanging skin around a wolf or dog-like creature's mouth, and the previous line put that image in my mind with the starving wolves, i was simply commenting on what i saw when i read this artist's work, something you might take note of and put to use yourself