Some haiku we had to write for class

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By lost the lonely dead •

(we werent following the five seven five thing, we were focusing on setting a mood and then doing something to it at the end) Quiet night The rain falls softly Lightening strikes Mid-summer The hot sun beats down A spring spouts water A crowd Laughing, carousing, jeering She sits all alone Speechless Words conflict awkwardly Poetry immerges Darkness A peaceful quiet night The farm’s on fire Robots All the same all lifeless He pulls the trigger

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April 22, 2006 22:36♥Just Sam♥

it isn't called haiku if it isn't 5,7,5... what you made is called a short poem....wow....who would have thought of that?

April 23, 2006 03:51lost the lonely dead

actually no........5 7 5 makes horrable haiku, by contemporary standards.....the real way to right it is to forget the formula and focus on setting a "hai" and thne punching it at the end with a 'Ku' contemporary poetry breaks and sacrifices formulas and rules for creativity and in my opinion makes for better writing

May 1, 2006 23:30Loneliness is condescending

what did you do to tick her off jeeeze and by the way i like the poem 5,7,5...5,7,5 rules confine and die

May 2, 2006 16:08lost the lonely dead

yeah hey i like the vote rock on i got a 1 anyway......yeah i dont really care one way or the other but it was what the teach said *shrugs* sorry if i came across as upset or 'condescending'