The Dance, by Liberty or Death Subscribe to rss feed for Liberty or Death

Over the years
I have seen
Faces with tears
Shouts
And screams
Eyes filled with nothing but sadness
Faces shadowed from all the madness
Words told from a lie
Some wanting to lay down and die
Drugs taken to shield the pain
Alcohol swallowed to numb the brain
Thoughts drift inside a head
Empty enough to be considered dead 
Objects sway as vision blurs
Things can't seem to get much worse
Hearing grows while smell fades
It's gone too far for medicine's aid
Actions become a game of chance
To them it's just a little dance
A dance with a gambler
The gambler a killer
A killer in many ways
A gambler who'll play for days
To dance all night
Means to play with death
So what will they do?
When it's their last breath.... 
Posted: 2006-08-14 04:32:37 UTC

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2006-08-14 07:52:55User
I am not sure why I can't relate at all, I am usually able to relate to many poems but..one thing I can tell you...rhyming is not a must in a poem..

2006-08-15 18:40:20Liberty or Death
It's actually a poem of someone else's life that I've seen. I know rhyming isn't a must, but every time I right a poem I try to rhyme automaticaly. I'll keep your advise in mind the next time I right a poem. Thank you for your comment!

2006-09-15 17:17:32Faith
It's not a bad poem though...

2006-10-31 06:18:19lost the lonely dead
the ryhming issue asside, it doesnt seem to flow rythmically very well, the intro is pretty good...if i were doing it id maybe try: Over the years Ive seen faces with tears shouts and some screams eyes, filled with the nothingness only sadness faces, carefully shaded shadows hidden from maddness wanting only to lay down, and die drugs for the brain and brain for drugs yet a little liquor to feed the numbness thoughts drift in and out clinically, emptily dead objects sway in blurriness scent giving way to noise medicated beyond a chance at hope poker-faced reality seeps into this dreamworld but its only a dance one little dance nothing but a gamble nothing really gambling for the souls of idiots the gameplay never ending a dance that goes on spinning intending to tease death so what'll they do? last breath's on their lips... what could save them then? anyhow just a thought...nothing more really

2009-10-28 23:22:55Moon
I can't explain how well written it is