Dripping on the Denim

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By thesexygreenmnm •

The splash of the drop As it falls off my cheek Or my nose, it rolls from my eye To my chin, leaving a wet Trail behind, salty for the pain And suffering I have been Through with you and him And her and me and them and nobody knows The wetness of the tears As they release from My eyes but don't bring A release from my heart, and I keep Hurting inside because the Salt stings as it goes over the cuts Imaginary cuts On my face as the tears are Dripping down down then fall And splash against the denim as I explain everything to Him because he made me Wanted and loved But now he doesn't and he doesn't Want me or love me And the tears come because I miss Everything that used to be And the salt stings my eyes As the wells in back overflow Dripping on the denim And I want it to stop But I want it to go And I want it to hurt And flow with the tears But it stays locked inside Because nobody wants me anymore Dripping on the denim I've ruined it all Dripping on the denim

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September 19, 2005 02:21ill haven

Very descriptive and repetitive.

I like the odd number meter. It makes for good sounding proetry (prose/poetry)

I also liked the use of antonyms in lines 29-31 (I believe) stop, go hurt and flow with the tears

I absolutely LOOOOOVE when poets don't force rhymes to be at the end of each line: "But I want it to go/And I want it to hurt/And flow with the tears"

It seems as if it would be well heard if it were recited. Try speaking it in front of others.

March 10, 2008 01:17emo kid

that is great!