By Felicia •
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very good. if you don't mind some constructive critism, this sounds mor like the closing line to a poem rather than a poem in itself. but good job.
Yes i know i need to be adding more to them there just rough idea any way so how is tis one better? oh and i love criticism it helps me to be better
i like it well done
i still like it... thanx for ur comment
This is short and nice but for some reasons I kind of agree with Angel of Music..maybe you can write a few more lines after the 1st or 2nd line e.g. the things she has been through in life, what makes her have to choose this path and maybe also how maybe add some imagery on how she ascends to Heaven's Gate or something like that..its just my opinion lol..I hope it makes sense to you..