My Love I give to Someone Special

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By Eclipse of the Moon •

You stole my heart when you took my hand, keep it safe now, do you understand? My love is yours, True and Free. Please say that you trust me. I am yours and you are mine, will you please be mine till the end of time? As I count the days until I see you, my feelings, you can be certain, are always true. Those chains you lifted from my heart, are now a curtain, hanging in the dark. Never to touch me once again. and I will Love you with all my Heart.

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May 19, 2009 21:37...

Oooh I really like this, the only thing I would say is on the line "will you please be mine till the end of time?" I think you have too many syllables here, maybe you could try changing it a little bit as it doesn't fit in with the others?? Still apart from that it's really good! I love the use of rhyme and you've got some great imagery in there!!