Forbidden Love- part 1 The Look

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By Annie B. SnowRaven •

They just stood there Right there in the schoolyard The first look was easy Not complicated, not hard He saw her as a friend Only she wasn't so sure She felt something, something new Was something about to occur? She fell into his deep green eyes As he walked slowly towards her "Hey" His voice ringed in her ear A voice that truly enchanted her She smiled happily But didn’t do anything else He smiled again… back at her Sorry, but this is what the story tells

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June 28, 2008 15:01Annie B. SnowRaven

Come on!! Please tell me what you think!!

July 1, 2008 22:29 ~~~~GLOSTARG~~~~

the story tells of a dreamy love inspired crush. Oh what people hold back never letting the feelings be known. How can we even be rejected if no one ever knows? hmmm? something to think about. very good poem!:) Glo

August 1, 2008 22:41Karen

i LOVE it!!! i always vote all or nothing. I really like this great job.

May 19, 2009 21:31...

I like this, I like the idea behind it the only problem is it reads more like a story, to me, than poetry, but I dunno there's still something about it that I like, I think with a tiny bit more work this could be really, really good!