Pardon Me!!!

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By !!! A DOUBLE EDGED SWORD !!! •

Can't you hear my soul so loudly screaming? From this false hope and such relentless scheming? Can't you see this heart has been taken? Brutally shaken, battered, and breaking? Can't you feel this heartache and pain? As these tears roll off my face and descend like rain? I need a hand to lift me up, not beat me down! For this heart of mine is already deep beneath the ground Bleeding, bound, lost amongst this rubble and cannot be found. Feel my suffering? Hear my torment? Can you see this complete despondency? If so than you must taste the bitterness of hate that consumed my sanity!!!!!!

Current vote: 4.5 / 5

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November 16, 2008 09:03Simply-Me-20104

Thanks so much for the comments! It really means a lot to me! This is an extremely powerful poem and has a LOT to say! I admire your word usage! It flows REALLY well!

March 25, 2009 19:24kristin fricke

this is the poem i love.There is so much emotion behind it. And it is written perfectly! great job

April 2, 2009 17:11!!! A DOUBLE EDGED SWORD !!!

THANK YOU THIS TO IS ONE OF MY FAV'S I ACTUALLY MADE THIS IN TO A SONG

April 14, 2009 17:03...

Oooooh I love this! It's so powerful and emotional and really well written, well done!!

April 24, 2009 18:54Janjan

Dear !!!DOUBLE EDGED SWORD !!!: Good way of expressing yourself. Thanks for reading my poem Sweet Love Nectar. I'm so glad that you liked it. Love, Janjan xoxo

May 4, 2009 14:36Ashley Reneë *Raining Tears*

this is GREAT! i like it

May 23, 2009 01:43izzy

wow such a powerful poem. great meaning and word choice, love the last two lines... amazing!

May 29, 2009 23:45Azure Faye

Hey Chuck. I was reading this, and i was like, I NEED to show this to my friend. Its like you wrote it for her. Your a wonderful person, ya know? Thats my judgement for you, mi amigo.

June 26, 2009 05:43!!! A DOUBLE EDGED SWORD !!!

THANKS

August 10, 2009 00:53ma_chapa3xD

oh W-O-W! that TOTALLY deserves a 10 haha:D youre awesome! keep it up

November 1, 2012 02:24Laura Glossop

Very powerful words, can almost here the pain within the words. Great job :) x