The World...Is Him...

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By LostChild •

The world is harsh The world is cruel The world only wants to rule He was my friend The one I could trust I told him everything The false and the true Something went wrong Maybe I sang the wrong song Coz now he’s cruel He’s harsh He only wants to rule He tells lies about me He smears my name for all to see I don’t know what I did I don’t know what to do His mouth is filled with sinful words His actions speak ugly words He has no heart His heart has gone Something is wrong with this song....

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December 11, 2008 04:14 ~~~~GLOSTARG~~~~

What touches me most about your poem is the last line of the poem. "something went wrong"... so much said in these words, and actually might work in the 'imaginative intro' for the reader of this poem. I know I am running on with maybe a little much comment, but sometimes a poem grabs me and other times it wont. This poem not only grabs me but it calls out for help....
a very touching poem! Keep writing poetry! :) Great !

January 9, 2009 15:55Danny Wilson

Its not the World which is harsh or cruel.Its some of the people in it.Its good that you vent your feelings in poetry because it truly helps .Danny

May 27, 2009 06:59dispersed_sky

i am really impressed by your work
go on and let the words speak for you...