The World...Is Him..., by LostChild
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The world is harsh
The world is cruel
The world only wants to rule
He was my friend
The one I could trust
I told him everything
The false and the true
Something went wrong
Maybe I sang the wrong song
Coz now he’s cruel
He’s harsh
He only wants to rule
He tells lies about me
He smears my name for all to see
I don’t know what I did
I don’t know what to do
His mouth is filled with sinful words
His actions speak ugly words
He has no heart
His heart has gone
Something is wrong with this song....
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| Posted: 2008-11-03 14:55:17 UTC |
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| 2008-12-11 04:14:35 | ~~~~GLOSTARG~~~~ |
| What touches me most about your poem is the last line of the poem. "something went wrong"... so much said in these words, and actually might work in the 'imaginative intro' for the reader of this poem. I know I am running on with maybe a little much comment, but sometimes a poem grabs me and other times it wont. This poem not only grabs me but it calls out for help....
a very touching poem! Keep writing poetry! :) Great ! |
| 2009-01-09 15:55:27 | Danny Wilson |
| Its not the World which is harsh or cruel.Its some of the people in it.Its good that you vent your feelings in poetry because it truly helps .Danny |
| 2009-05-27 06:59:46 | dispersed_sky |
| i am really impressed by your work
go on and let the words speak for you...
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