Suicide, by little_irish_rose
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Don't speak, hush... hear that sound. The darkness, is creeping all around. Sorrow comes, in an excesive dose. Lonely, angry, depressed most. The devil comes, sets me ablaze. Burnt and hurt, the pain goes on for days. It's cold, I'm freezing with no heat. The pain, the cuts went to deep. I'm bleeding, the blood is a dark red. No concentration, too many voices in my head. The blade, it lays against my wrist. The cut, to escape tears I clench my fist. It's red, it's bloody dripping on the floor. It's over, I am no more. The end, I no longer hide. The truth, I committed suicide. |
| Posted: 2005-06-23 04:53:37 UTC |
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| 2005-06-25 23:39:07 | Rodriguez De Paulo |
| I don't really know if its what you want to hear right now! I don't know you and i can't say whether this poem was written as a cry for help, or just because of poetry! But i really love your poem! The rhyming scheme really stands out and i think you have real talent! I myself have been at that point of suicide and i can say its not a nice feeling! But sites like this make people feel better and if theres at least one comment on everyones poem then i think we avoid certain unhappiness and hopefully suicide! Thank you for such a meaningful poem! T | |
| 2005-07-31 20:10:15 | little_irish_rose |
| thank you thomas i really appreciate that you took the time to send me a comment...... | |
| 2005-09-15 11:06:55 | My_pain_your_thrill |
| Hey, I totally agree with all Thomas has said. This is an amazing poem. And I have been at the point of suicide too. This site helps because reading other people's pain makes me realise Im not alone, and you're not alone either. Hopefully we will always be strong enough to fight depression, and the urge to harm ourself, or, for that matter, kill our self! Anyway, amazing poem xxx | |
| 2005-09-17 04:03:37 | little_irish_rose |
| thanx.... i really appreciate your comments..... :) | |
| 2005-10-07 22:34:28 | hidden |
| I have to agree again with Thomas and my_pain_your_thrill, this is a really well written poem. I can't say that I've ever been on the verge of suicide but I've felt deppresion and certainly contemplated it. the poem portrays the hurt so well, the imagery is brilliant. you are really talented, I think that if i could get the imagery right i might be a decent poet but thats just what i lack i suppose | |
| 2005-12-17 01:02:16 | love nothing >>-- |
| this poem is honest and i love it! i have been, and am on the verge of breaking down because im so sick of things, but i know im not alone. i agree with everyone ^^ | |
| 2006-12-18 06:39:24 | User |
| Wow..powerful indeed..so well described as well..I can really relate as I have attempted once but in a different manner though,this is awesone..!! | |