Forever the sun., by Sara
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I look up; the sun shines down upon me, I feel its heat, like taking a warm bath, How can something so powerful, magical, Bring light, warmth and life, And yet at the same time, Bring death, misery and darkness? I let its soothing rays fall all around me, Like a snake out of place, looking, But I know, this cant last forever, Someday it’ll bring death to all, the end, The maker of life, The destroyer of life, The sun lasts forever . . . |
| Posted: 2005-08-14 18:01:16 UTC |
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| 2005-08-14 16:31:55 | Lora |
| This is good sara although i think the first line should have the "I look up;" taken out of it..it would give the poem more rythm good though xx | |
| 2005-08-15 19:35:07 | hidden |
| YOu quite like the sun don't you? Anyway I like this yet I fail to see how the sun brings misery and darkness. I think thats the lack of the sun maybe? still good stuff. | |
| 2005-08-19 13:40:01 | silver_shadow |
| i like your poem!!!! you are very talented, keep at it! | |
| 2005-11-05 00:18:00 | Crimson.Wings |
| I like this poem. thanx 4 commenting on my poems. | |
| 2005-11-20 06:54:01 | Mykl |
| I understand the ways that the sun destroys life. Everything must have an opposite to exist. You are doing marvelous work. Keep writing out the pain . It will serve you well. | |