and i watched as it all fell apart....

By look how pretty she is when she falls down... •
By look how pretty she is when she falls down... •
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maybe restless would suit it it really is superbly written and has such vivid imagery i really liked reading this poem
I'm not sure about this poem. I like the content and the implications, but reading it...well I'm not sure, it didn't read well to me. It seemed to change pace all to often. I liked the poem itself but reading it was a bit of a pain. it might just be me though
debz: thanks i'll use that! and thanks for the comment
hidden: yea this was my first poem.. like ever and yea its not just you, not a whole lot of people get my poetry.
wow..i loved it...dont change the title..it fits well in my opinion :)
I really like this poem, theres something almost wistful about it... and I think it does read well, maybe thats just my interpretation though.
Beautiful as a good bike trail!
i like this poem too.. it is unique, and i a couple of parts it kinda drifts and i didn't really get it.. but overall i think ur a good writer... and i like the title. i also like ur user name =)
i enjoyed reading this poem. youo did a good job writing it.
i enjoyed reading this poem. you did a good job writing it.
it's a great peom!
As mystic as a wind's sound. As blissfull as water's feel.