Reunion, by hidden
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Fianlly i've found you
wile wading through the tears
I hold you in my arms
To vanquish our fears
a Bang
a Shot
a Ringing sound
a Look of shock
the Blood is spilt
it Flows from your head
this Torrent of red
i'm Drowning in it
as Toment takes it's grip
your Blood
your Life
your Soul
your Dead
cut Down in my arms
the Bullet for my charms
the Gun of my past
the Motions. the Notions
Forever will last |
| Posted: 2005-11-03 10:42:23 UTC |
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| 2005-10-14 08:59:21 | hidden |
| Damnit. I was looking over this poem and saw a little room for improvement. However i pressed the delete instead of the edit (oops) |
| 2005-10-14 21:52:35 | waterlily |
| it doesnt sound like a fun reunion to me...it sounds like you didnt give a rip about the person that got shot and that is a trip! |
| 2005-10-18 21:15:36 | hidden |
| Has no one twigged that the shooting is METAPHORICAL!!! goddamnit. At the time i was really upset that she didn't care and would disragerd me liek she did but now i really couldn't care less. |
| 2005-11-01 13:09:49 | Finding Myself♥♥ |
| soul, not sole. thanks for commenting me. your poem here is good. so are you suppose to be shooting her. that is exactly how i feel some times. this guy that i like, well, love, makes me so mad sometimes. this is a good, well not really good, but a way to stop thinking of it as much. not doing it for real though, just thinking it. |
| 2005-11-03 10:42:07 | hidden |
| Thanks for the spellchecking, I'm hopeless. I just want to say this is a hypothetical situation that is representative of what happend between me and her. I loved her then she went with someone else, then about five months later she came back (hence the reunioon) we were all happy etc etc then some ###### decided to tell her half the things i said about her when she cheated on me (the bullet). Almost all my friends understood that but no one on here seems to have seen it. Anyway this remains my favourite poem and my first. Thanks everyone for reading and commenting on it. |
| 2005-11-05 22:11:58 | waterlily |
| hidden are you Italianio? did you really love her so much you had to shoot her dead?(did you love her Pussy that much?lol) |
| 2005-11-07 22:18:03 | hidden |
| Wow you really are the most annoying person on here aren't you waterlily. Now i know I posted some harsh comments on your poems and I suppose I'm sorry for that but come on, this is just childish |
| 2005-12-09 18:57:23 | Lillian |
| I like it. The rhyming made me go back and read it aloud. |