Paralysis

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By <font color=crimson>Faith •

<font size=2>The words flow from his lips like water. Sharp Cold. Biting to the bone. They strip away skin, tearing through to the heart-- now frozen. Paralised. Unmoving. While the tears fall-- surprisingly hot against the chill that crashes like a wave through every muscle-- uncerimoniously to the ground. And he walks away leaving a wall of winter in his wake. No backwards glances. No second thoughts. ©2005

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November 8, 2005 16:12Faith

--I originally wrote this poem in a different format, but didn't like it. So, after fiddling around with the structure and adding words here & there, this is the finished product.--

November 14, 2005 06:57bedazzled

I like this it's very powerful just one tip - paralysed not paralized :)

November 17, 2005 22:43Faith

--Thanks bedazzled, i fixed it! See... *points up at poem*--

November 19, 2005 17:04Kalie

wow...this is a really amazing poem

January 26, 2006 21:38 Kirsty (living in the light)

I am liking it. Its cool. So powerful it echoes through you. I must say you are brilliant at poetry. You are an amazing person not me

February 22, 2006 19:35lost the lonely dead

i read paralized first but both are good and i see why you said they went together...i hate it when people in our lives do things like this whether they mean to or not...and i know in a few ways ive done the deadly deed myself

February 3, 2008 02:38Dark Neko

Oh my gosh, I love this! Very very well done. Thank you for all your comments on my poems. Here's a 9.