Our Fate in Death (co-edit)

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By lost the lonely dead •

A life unfolds fate pushing her will The ever-growing shroud clouds all perfect judgement Squinting to see vague light in the distance Finding wardrobes turn black These realities look for understanding Words take on new meanings down deep lost in the despair of The grief that I can not fathom Pausing for the last time Collapsing in the snow covering my soul Will anyone follow me here? Leaving their crumbling darkness succumbing to the light I kinda like the changes, thanks...

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April 16, 2006 05:56Loneliness is condescending


um lets see... A life unfolds Fate will take her way/ these things of ever clouding judgment break away to clearer days/Lost in Wonder. what was I thinking?/ My new reality becomes an understanding/ Words take new meanings/ Lost in a drowning despair of grief that I can not fathom/ pausing for the last time/ collapsing in the snow of my soul/ Will the others follow me here/ Leaving their crumbling darkness succumbing to the light

April 16, 2006 23:57lost the lonely dead

thanks for the input, its sooo much "better" now *thumb up* actually i do like your suggestions and it keeps to the point of the piece