shining big black eyes

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By mia •

shining big black eyes smiling cheerful cheeks speaking all funny things my little baby... won't you know how this play is should not know how it is i, witnessing all that unbearable realities, can not wait for the possibilities! take my hand little girl! we go outside close the door forget about how was it before and lead to an eternal life we got never before...

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January 4, 2006 00:47HangmanTheory

good, but you need some revisions and you need to change the order of some words...stuff like that. but overall a good poem.

January 12, 2006 02:55love nothing >>--

I love it!

January 24, 2006 17:21mia

i am turk. and that's my first try to write a poem in english.. and i did not think about it so much..i just wrote it as it came..

January 25, 2006 13:25 Kirsty (living in the light)

Well, I think it is good, poetry is not how it is written but why and how you felt when you wrote it.

January 28, 2006 23:23 ~~~~GLOSTARG~~~~

Hi Mia, I like your poem very much! if this is your first attempt to write the poem in english translation it was a good one!keep writing! Salam

February 13, 2006 17:31mia

i'm glad:))

February 18, 2006 02:08Crimson.Wings

this is a nice poem. thanx 4 commenting on my poems!

February 22, 2006 02:18krystalblu

I think it is beautiful

June 5, 2007 18:33Forbidden Heart

Loves it... nice...