my love's the ocean, your heart's the moon, by izzy
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all through the misrey and pain
still together we shall remain
and through the bad and through the good
we'll have the life i knew we should
it'd be so simple, so simple
if they knew:
when we're together ,easily,
they drown themselves in jealsousy
life would never mean a thing
without your love i couldn't sing
i can't explain it, explain it
this is the only way:
i never felt this way, could this be real?
they say it's pupppy love, but it could be real
the way you walk, and how you look, and how you speak
when i spend time with you my day has reached it's peak
trying to explain my love, trying trying it all day
finally came up with something here's what i have to say:
my love's the ocean
your heart's the moon
when we get closer
they drown so soon
i'll hold on forever
never let you go
and that is one thing
i hope you'll always know |
Posted: 2008-11-28 02:39:04 UTC |
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2008-11-21 23:39:05 | Simply-Me-20104 |
Interesting format! It really works well with the overall flow! Very expressive and heartfelt and great word choice! |
2008-12-18 15:09:25 | Tyler Cedric Golden |
i like it very much indeed very well and the symbolism you used in showing feelings towards one another....splendid job.... |
2009-01-27 19:46:48 | Janjan |
Dear Smeckledwarf: Very nicely done. Loved reading it. Love, Janjan xoxo |
2009-02-11 01:56:51 | ma_chapa3xD |
OMG!!! SPECKLEDWARF!!! that was AMAZING ILOVE IT!!! thx for your comment btw. keep on writing!
with LUVE
rachel frella ;) |
2009-02-12 01:27:20 | ma_chapa3xD |
im SO SORRy i spelled us name wrong this happens a lot with other thigs haha ya well keepon writing U ROX! ;)
~rachel |
2009-05-02 08:17:27 | Gabrielle |
very sweet! sounds just like love |
2009-06-17 02:55:42 | 11 Tragedy's |
Maybe love is so far away, and love reflects their heart. Sometimes I think I'm in puppy love because I've written so many about different boys, but it all didn't work out =\ |
2009-07-26 05:45:06 | Lily |
great job very intresting |
2009-09-29 15:25:20 | Hannah George |
Yeah Izzy, I love this poem it's relatable and true. Thanks for positive feedback on my poem. |
2009-11-30 01:26:49 | Katelyn7 |
wow this is amazing! |
2010-11-02 19:23:00 | Sarah |
i like this one. and thanks for the comment |