my love's the ocean, your heart's the moon

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By izzy

all through the misrey and pain still together we shall remain and through the bad and through the good we'll have the life i knew we should it'd be so simple, so simple if they knew: when we're together ,easily, they drown themselves in jealsousy life would never mean a thing without your love i couldn't sing i can't explain it, explain it this is the only way: i never felt this way, could this be real? they say it's pupppy love, but it could be real the way you walk, and how you look, and how you speak when i spend time with you my day has reached it's peak trying to explain my love, trying trying it all day finally came up with something here's what i have to say: my love's the ocean your heart's the moon when we get closer they drown so soon i'll hold on forever never let you go and that is one thing i hope you'll always know

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November 21, 2008 23:39Simply-Me-20104

Interesting format! It really works well with the overall flow! Very expressive and heartfelt and great word choice!

December 18, 2008 15:09Tyler Cedric Golden

i like it very much indeed very well and the symbolism you used in showing feelings towards one another....splendid job....

January 27, 2009 19:46Janjan

Dear Smeckledwarf: Very nicely done. Loved reading it. Love, Janjan xoxo

February 11, 2009 01:56ma_chapa3xD

OMG!!! SPECKLEDWARF!!! that was AMAZING ILOVE IT!!! thx for your comment btw. keep on writing!
with LUVE
rachel frella ;)

February 12, 2009 01:27ma_chapa3xD

im SO SORRy i spelled us name wrong this happens a lot with other thigs haha ya well keepon writing U ROX! ;)
~rachel

May 2, 2009 08:17Gabrielle

very sweet! sounds just like love

June 17, 2009 02:5511 Tragedy's

Maybe love is so far away, and love reflects their heart. Sometimes I think I'm in puppy love because I've written so many about different boys, but it all didn't work out =\

July 26, 2009 05:45Lily

great job very intresting

August 30, 2009 18:24adam greenleaf

its pretty good the way its written

September 29, 2009 15:25Hannah George

Yeah Izzy, I love this poem it's relatable and true. Thanks for positive feedback on my poem.

November 30, 2009 01:26Katelyn7

wow this is amazing!

December 6, 2009 00:44~♥miss crazy♥~

its very good:)

November 2, 2010 19:23Sarah

i like this one. and thanks for the comment