Concept of Hell, by Tyler Cedric Golden |
I’ve never thought much of a Concept of Hell, but if one exists I’m in it, It’s like a dark pit Or a pitch black hole, It sucks in everything including my soul, Nothing comes out but things go in, Why I go in is for my sins that have not been forgiven, Lost memories flash before my eyes And I want to die, There’s nothing I can do in a pool full of horribly terrifying memories, No hope, no help, no friends, or dreams, Just pain and suffering, It’s like a machine, Hell does everything, Except break down, One day I could be sitting alone in any abandoned town And feeling terribly down, It could cause an unwanted suicide, For this treacherous way I feel inside, Once I hit the floor or just swiftly fell, The next thing I know I’m living in Hell, Questions overflow my crowded mind And in due time, I try to answer and try to forget, But I’m stuck in this unforgivable pit, It’s not what I want it to be, But I have to open my stricken bloodshot eyes and see, I try so hard, but can’t stop thinking, I didn’t care about the concept of Hell, Until I fell, A horrible fall in which now this hole I dwell, Nothings what I want it to be And I just can’t understand and see, I never get what I want, I become a forgotten soul that can do nothing but haunt, Heaven was my goal, but now its nothing more than a taunt, As I’m consumed by scorching degrees of flames, The Devil violently roars my name And I scream in this newly star stricken pain, It’s nothing but merciless torture and hate, That is chosen by birth which becomes my fate, The Devil shows no pity And tells me this is my destiny, No one cares, because life isn’t fair… I would like to tell you about the concept of Hell, There is an absolute dark place where nothing good is as it seems or feels, Everything seems completely unreal, If you were once at the top and then because of your ignorance you fell, It’s because…. You never thought of THE CONCEPT OF HELL!!! By: Tyler Cedric Golden 10/16/08 |
Posted: 2008-12-15 17:39:22 UTC |
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2008-12-18 17:52:13 | !!! A DOUBLE EDGED SWORD !!! |
I SAY PUT YOUR RIGHT HAND TO YOUR CHEST AND FEEL FOR EVERY HEART BEAT THERE IS ANOTHER CHANCE TO BE SAVED AND LIFT OUT YOUR LEFT HAND AND JESUS SHALL COME FOR YOU!!!!!! |
2008-12-19 06:25:09 | Chalan |
I can really relate to the darkness and hopelessness of this poem. But I really enjoyed reading this. It gives great insight as to how living in your own personal hell feels like. and I liked your choice of words and the descriptivness about it. |
2009-01-09 07:43:11 | Lesbian Eggrolls. |
Super duper job man, Your vocabulary skills really shine in this poem. It flows smoothly, and brings out some real emotion, two thumbs up!! |
2009-01-10 12:38:53 | *Confidential~Versifier* |
Good Shit HomeBoy ill answer back wit Concept of Hevan (give me sometime though) |
2009-01-15 21:55:06 | |
concepts and precepts ...Heaven or Hell.. "Choose you this day whom you will serve, ...But as for me and my house, we will serve the LORD. |
2009-03-02 03:23:18 | Felicia |
Well i do like this poem ...but not for the reason you must think. I enjoy poems full of expression, poems that make you feel alive (even if death is the main topic). This is kinda long not that I'm being critical, its just if you hadn't asked me to read this and i was just browsing i would have skipped it because of the length. One thing i love in a poem is description and this poem was full of it. Felicia Mac |
2009-03-18 03:53:02 | little_irish_rose |
wow... i'm sorry it took me so long to respond to the comment you left on my poem, but i'm deffinately kicking myself for not doing this sooner. once started reading i couldn't stop. it's very captivating, in a way that makes the mind really think, what does happen on the other side. after reading this i actually wanted to go to church and confess my sins for the first time in years. the wording, the descriptiveness, it's all good and like the people who have commented before me, obviously it's been said before where this one is concerned. but i believe every writer likes to be praised regardless of the repitition... so i will tell you, like previous comments, that you did a fanatical and amazing job, and it was a pleasure and actually an honor to read. |
2009-03-22 14:14:47 | Dore' |
I think this poem will touch everyones hearts, even someone who doesnt care much. This is really good and I can see that alot of your skill went into this poem. |
2009-03-25 14:37:00 | Ashley Reneë *Raining Tears* |
wow this is very very very good!! its amazing |
2009-03-29 20:47:09 | jj |
this is great. what i read so far, it is top1. wow |
2009-04-06 00:38:35 | *Psychopathic Child* |
THIS IS AN AMAZING POEM "THE CONCEPT OF HELL" VERY EXPRESSIVE AND SEEMS LIKE YOU MAYBE IN A DARK PLACE I YOUR LIFE THAT YOU CAN'T BRAKE FREE OF AND THUS YOU FALL IN THE DEPTHS OF HELL THAT YOU LIVE IN. LOVE THIS POEM. |
2009-04-12 16:41:53 | SMILING DARKNESS |
wow, you have a gazillion comments. lol. This poem, it's so much like a realization that people dont see at first of what could become of them going down the wrong path. I know this feeling of a dark torturing place with nothing but bad memories and strictly hate. And i wish the whole world, anyone in it, could find hope. And see that there is another chance. A way to be self-saved |
2009-05-02 08:33:26 | Gabrielle |
very good. it is the battle that has been going on since the creation of the world. there is not one person who hasnt felt like that. |
2009-05-18 00:40:09 | Your Everlasting |
gr8! |
2009-05-28 14:29:51 | KayDe$ |
I like this poem alot. It shows true emotion and thought. Two thumbs up! |